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Death is Natural

Author: Linkins_knot
ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer
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Words: 146
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Our teacher just died today and they made an announcement about it and got everyone depressed about it so the school is very quiet today... I didnt know her personally but she was still a good teacher, wife, Daughter, and Friend to all..

Death is Natural

I know the pain everyone was left to gain
A person left, she did not kill or commit theft
But she past away
No one knowing what happened on that day
She did no seize to exist
She in a better, happier place filled with bliss
Death is not bad, even you may cry and get mad
"Why did she have to go??
All that cry, not wishing this person to die
She should be proud of the crying crowd
Because she knows everyone care about her
This for her family was a nightmare
This was one thing she did not deserve
She may have left the world, but not your hearts
You connection together will not drift apart
You love for her kept her alive
Kepp loving, she will continue to survive...

-Dedicated to Mrs. Perkins Lovers
Mrs. Perkins Rest.In.Peace. March 31,2006-

Submitted on 2006-03-31 11:56:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  awww how sad!!! thats sad that she died!! ya death does hurt! A LOT!! i think you should give this to her family they would prodbaly appreciate it a lot! good joB!
| Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Awwwww. I almost cried when I read this. It's so touchy, but also happy in a sense. I love how you explained that even though death hurts, there's nothing wrong with it and it's a chance for that person to get away from the pain they were in. Also, if this is dedicated to someone you cared about, I'm very sorry about your loss. But good job on the poem.

| Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by imaginarylight6 | [ Reply to This ]

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