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    dots Submission Name: Gold Rush Gonedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Prose/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 724
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    Description:
       Sitting in the pouring rain on the porch of a house in downtown Placerville - from the days of old when everyone came to seek their fortunes - all was not so bright and shiny even then and the houses have their stories.

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    dotsGold Rush Gonedots
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    The hustle & bustle
    still
    at a different
    place in time.......

    Though the melancholy, dilapitated
    homes lay as to the graveyard
    in the search
    for Gold.

    The Gold had just changed
    colors and now had turned
    Green
    of
    Envy
    life
    &
    of
    spite.

    Yet, the town had a special
    aura
    still
    As a flower freshly bloomed
    with no appreciative eyes
    2
    See
    True
    Beauty.

    A love neglected
    still
    the grey
    only cloaking
    the blinding
    brightness of day.

    So, we sing a song
    2
    "IT's"
    Glory
    as we play, "The Song
    Remains the Same...."

    If there is no reason
    there is no 1 to blame.




    Submitted on 2006-03-31 13:26:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dear God! I really do like this one, a very nice piece of prose you got here. I never seen such creativity incoporated into a prose write. This was very, very good. I am going to add it to my fav's list. A definite kudos to you.

    Keep up the great work and have a blessed and most wonderful day and God bless. Thanks so much for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm guessing you're not a very greedy person, and are more "hippy" type so speak, but hey you could also be a ravenous serial killer, who's to say. a like the meaning and the subtle beauty intertwined with the neglegence of mankind. bye now
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good! I think this made a statement about how we let money and the chase of it interfere with our ability to enjoy the simple things in life as of old days, such as houses from a long gone generation. The flowers, the sunshine after a long rainy period. This to me was a wonderful way to remind us to take stock in the treasures of the past and not just focus on money. I like the way you tied all the negative traits that come with wanting nothing but money. and how greed was back then in the form of gold, but just changed currencey. I like the imagery of the houses looked forgone as a grave would. Your imagery was very good. So was your flow. Good work Tiff!

    Trina
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this piece. It has very much truth behond it and it really keeps the read sucked into the poem. It's very clever and intelligent piece. Great work dear.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the part about the town's aura compared to a flower freshly bloomed, with no eyes to see its beauty.
    The neglected life of a town that once was thriving with people and stories.. yet you can still "feel" the nostalgic atmosphere of its ghost.

    I'm not sure I understood it entirely..but I liked the overall feel... though, I kept wanting to read this line as.. "homes lay as a graveyard in search for gold".

    Enjoyed!
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      In days of old in days of gold
    When everyone was greedy
    No one cared and no one dared
    To try and help the needy.

    Up to your usual standard Tiffaroo.

    A very enjoyable read.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really clever and beautiful
    This is written in your own unique way of writing which I love very much
    I take the Gold as representing the urge one has to find the true meaning of life
    I really liked this
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this piece. I can hear it bounce around my mind. You did a good job with this. I love the last two stanzas.
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by james110182 | [ Reply to This ]


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