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    dots Submission Name: Confessiondots
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    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       Someone who knows the feeling...


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    It's insidious, this feeling..
    Like stabs to the midsection, a slow tortous death...
    and it hurts, but not all the time, or even some of the time... it's just that sneaky.
    Scent.
    Sometimes just the smell of a mans cologne or seeming a distant masqueline similarity will bring back memories of hard, larte, hot hands. Memories that leave you hovering between emptying the contents of your stomah, or screaming until your throat is raw and bleeding. And the worst part is the feeling of utter loss. The sense that you aren't really worth much more than what a monster used you for. It's a scary thing to be stuck in a shell thats only seen as overtly sexually, and because you are a black woman, that race known for it's strenth and survival in the hardest of times, you cannot show your frailty to the world, or even accept it in yourself.





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      Interesting take. I like the duality of this, the way people expect you to be versus the way you really are/want to be. I wish you'd expand on this - you've got an excellent start here. Other than running a spell chaeck, I don't see a thing I'd change. Excellent!

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      You most certainly are a good writer
    I can feel the emotion you are speaking of in this write
    I too have had almost the same experiences that you describe and it is sad how someone can use and abuse you leaving you without a sense of Pride
    My Friend I can tell you are recovering
    Please remain Positive
    That Positive energy will carry you through
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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