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    dots Submission Name: Emotional Wreckdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEmotional Wreckdots
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    My emotions pile up;
    your emotions do the same.
    We collide and break down,
    but we don't need anyone
    to clear away our wreckage;
    we can do it ourselves,
    and we embrace
    carefully avoiding the jagged edges.





    Submitted on 2004-05-05 19:49:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Once more...I apologize for the first part of my comment. I was just amazed that someone would be that rude!
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to write a comment to keep myself over 100%. So I'm using this piece to do that. What the HELL kind of comment is that to put on someones page? No wonder he gets no response for his work..Ugh!

    Anyway, sorry but that upset me. You deserve better than that...

    This is a couple that is going to make it through the long haul. They fill up, release the load and kiss and make up. They learn to avoid those sharp edges.

    I liked this a lot.
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great, i was an emotional wreck a couple of weeks ago, this really spoke to me great write short and simple straight to the point, excellent job!
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This seems very real to me. A good analogy of serious relationship on any level where we have to compromise and avoid stepping on each other's toes. I also like the points of contrast you create (up/down, anyone/ourselves, avoid/embrace). Nicely spaced, just lacks some background music.
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      good write. i loved the imagery of the sea with this write. fave line: We collide and break down
    But we don't need anyone
    To clear away our wreckage
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to write a comment to keep myself over 100%. So I'm using this piece to do that. Its a fine piece, but not near so full of great pictures as your best stuff. I'm a completely unemotional and undepressed person myself, which doesn't help me to connect here. I hate when I post something bad but everyone likes it more than my best stuff, which keeps happening. This whole format is burning an iron in my temple. I just posted two jokes that I wrote in two minutes and they got more positive comments than the stuff I slaved over.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      GOOD IN IT'S SHORTNESS BUT I THINK IT'S TO GOOD OF A CONCEPT TO BE LEFT WHERE IT IS,oops caps lock and i'm too lazy to re write any ways, i think you should make somthing going into a little more depth. but still great as it is.i like how you switch up the meaning of wreckage from a metaphor to a literal sense.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
      cute, nice and short, just how I adore your work. hehe. I like how you are not complaining, like in some poems like this, people complain that their emotions pile up, and they cannot deal, but you can, and you clear them by yourself, nice work
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      wow good job, its amazing how you managed to say so much in so few words..i wish i could do that..well..keep it up its great!
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by mandyshay07 | [ Reply to This ]
      Cuddledumplin is synonymous with short to the point power packed writes... this is no different... so much from so little... can you do that with finances too? lol... good one again... keep dat up
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      well said, in this piece, well said. i like how you can accomplish so much in so few words (i must agree that you do appear to have a knack for it). this is right to the point, and i enjoyed it.
    -dandan
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this one alot more than the other one. It seems short poems are your thing and you seem good at it. I really liked the part about avoiding the jagged edges, hard to do that sometimes isn't it? Anyway, good job.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by ACircuitShock | [ Reply to This ]
      Emotional Wreck
    Like walking barefoot on the beach, avoid the shards and jagged fragments of glass--until the winds of time, and sea of love have prevailed to polish smooth the edges. Amy, your recent work is markedly deep and ever so accurate at hitting the mark. Silver
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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