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    dots Submission Name: hypochondriadots
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    Author: nolram
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 41/46/19
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotshypochondriadots
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    boring bronchitis brings billions in antibiotics sales to the masses
    what in my throat makes me feel a need to medicate myself
    a self serving age fearful of death and morbid as hell
    pain in the neck a mass must be checked
    prolong life for as long as it takes to do whatever it is we are doing
    to fool whoever we are fooling
    to screw whoever we are screwing
    Enough
    the rapture my parents didn't find
    is not something I'll keep chasing in time
    Refusal, rage, and despair over seemingly cursed life
    Is a paradox of spiritual proportions
    soul abortion




    Submitted on 2006-03-31 16:55:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Abundant argosies of alliteration all about here, eh? The direction is blurry, I must say. I would, to extend this lovely free verse, go on about some metaphorical antibiotic resistence or human placebo, but man, this is pretty brill.. I think it could use something more though, you know? I really love reading people's freeverse, and this was a great read. Peace. -rue
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a deep write
    I sensed an incredible amount of anger in your write
    I take abort this life as meaning you are shedding your skin and letting in a little more Positive energy then was there before
    I pray you find what you are looking for
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      prolong life for as long as it takes to do whatever it is we are doing

    I really liked that line and the two that followed it, HA!

    I hate taking drugs...I even dont like taking the "recreational" ones anymore...self healing is the key and boy howdy...how this write of yours does remind me of that.

    Take a pill here, take a pill there...smoke this...drink that and you will be fine. Shucks...no wonder they havent come up with an anti-stupid pill because most people feel they "need" some sort of drug to be 'normal'...and how would the drug dealers and pharmacy types survive if we as a society didnt fall in to the thought of "I need that pill/drug"

    HA! Anyway, I like this and if I am off base who cares...ya know? I got something out of it and thats cool beans maynard! Yup, life is life...death is gonna come...if you need a drug of some sort to accept that, then so be it...just dont let it consume ya.

    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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