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    dots Submission Name: please play by yourselfdots
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    Author: liketherain
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 470
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    Description:
       Please play russian roulette by yourself... This is a poem if you can call it that by someone who is making my friend feel unnecessary pain... All because she really wants her cake and to eat it too... Please let me know if this is dumb, its been awhile ...


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    dotsplease play by yourselfdots
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    Have I fallen like the rain?
    Or is this pain just the same that you claim?
    And does that jusify the power of your touch
    Or the fact that you leaving wont hurt you that much?
    While he dances with the devil, you say youre sitting this one out...
    Confusions raining on you but you have the faintest of what thats really about
    If your love is not the same, then why are you two playing a lovers game?
    And when they say where do broken hearts go,
    I really hate to admit I know
    Every day I look in his eyes and see hope die
    While youre contradicted by lies-
    While you sit there with someone elses heart in your hands
    You're holding hands with someone else...





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