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    dots Submission Name: Marionettedots

    Author: obscureskies
    ASL Info:    19/F/Fredericton NB
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 11/17/15
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    The secret song plays in the background
    To me, the notes are unclear
    The words are muffled
    I hear your laughter
    I swallow my pride
    I need to face the music

    Puppet on a string
    I danced for you;
    I performed, even though
    My legs were unstable
    Your strings still protrude from my limbs
    One by one, you cut them from the handle
    Alone and out of control
    I crumple to the ground

    The world is a stage
    And I was merely played
    You sing your song to her
    The sweet, melodious notes
    Will never enter my ears
    And the beautiful tune will continue
    I could never ask you to stop

    Submitted on 2006-04-01 00:40:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      NICE! I like this poem it is different then what we usually read! I like it alot nicely executed! Keep up the good work peace & stay safe and let her play her song forever more!
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]

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