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    dots Submission Name: Unknowndots

    Author: obscureskies
    ASL Info:    19/F/Fredericton NB
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 11/17/15
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Always ready with an answer
    Never straying far from the path
    Map in hand, eyes on the road
    So strange, now, to plunge head first
    Into the unknown
    Unbeknownst to me, I have been there all along.

    Nothing is certain, and everything changes
    Places and deforms and reverts and diverges
    I fall upon you as you fall upon your knees
    I will hold you when youíre down
    But I will not hold you down
    I will hold your gaze in mine
    And wonder where it is we go when
    We gaze into each otherís eyes

    Always trying to find an answer
    And not ever knowing where the path will lead
    You come to me in my dreams
    Spilling your light upon the darkness
    Unbeknownst to me, you have been there all along.

    Submitted on 2006-04-01 00:41:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your title is perfect for the whole theme and feel of the poem. It gives off a dreamlike vibe about it. I'm not much of a writer myself, I wish I could offer helpful tips, other then keep up the good work <3

    but yes.
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by Dreamy Demise | [ Reply to This ]

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