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    dots Submission Name: My views on wardots
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    Author: ellesmera
    ASL Info:    18. Female. England
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 43/263/115
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 1158
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1032



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    dotsMy views on wardots
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    It started raining,
    the rain,
    it was painting,
    a picture,
    dripping,
    down the window.

    Racing with time,
    splashing,
    to the ground,
    not making a sound;
    puddles of water,
    they run to blood.

    The rats ,
    they are everywhere,
    the smell,
    intoxicating,
    the gunfire,
    everywhere,
    the shells,
    thats whats raining.

    How come we are,
    never at peace,
    how come theres always a war,
    how come,
    the innocence,
    does not save you
    from bad luck.

    It doesn't seem right to me,
    these weapons,
    of mass destruction,
    explosions,
    that cannot be blamed on the earth,
    we are merely,
    a virus,
    killing the earth.

    There soon wont be,
    trees in Africa;
    we are destroying,
    the earth,
    with our,
    lust for madness,
    war,
    and death.




    Submitted on 2006-04-01 08:56:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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