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    dots Submission Name: Changingdots
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    Author: Ryou_Bakura
    ASL Info:    16/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 35/43/13
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 206
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 476



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       I'm under contract of a publishing company, but I want reviews from the avarage readers not my editor. But tell me anything, I'm all open.


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    dotsChangingdots
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    If you can change, to suit what meets,
    be cursed to eternal defeat,
    or should you stand above the blessed
    and take there final breath.
    Should you change to suit these meets,
    or hurt till undone,
    or capture those who hate,
    but better yet let them think.
    Should you hide for none to see,
    poke at all the things
    but maybe find the one who cares not,
    but care about the changing heart inside.




    Submitted on 2006-04-01 17:05:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi, a poem for thought, good one. poe
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      One should never change one's self, unless for a greater good. Great intention and consept, a lil more structure though. More expression maybe...
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by spacedoutboy | [ Reply to This ]
      I am a fan of repetition, when properly used, however this actually seemed redundent. The rhyming sounded a bit forced as well as the structure. Also, the general topic of poem as well as the content was very stereotypical. All together, this was rather bland and nothing special to it. I apologize if I come off harsh, just being honest.

    Ciao
    Brandy
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by rockunsilenced | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your over all point to the poem However it does sound a bit repeative. Or Should is over and over again. Thanks Mandy
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by mandy dupuis | [ Reply to This ]



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