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i wish i knew a pretty song -------------------------------------------
i wish i knew a pretty song
that i could sing to you.
some special words of love and joy,
so we can start anew.
i wish i knew a story
to tell you every night;
a sweet romantic story
that would make your heart feel light.
i wish i could write a poem -
a verse to make you see
that you mean more than all the world
and all it holds to me.
i wish i knew what i could do
to make you feel the love for me
i've always felt for you.
well nice work here , my friend it reminds me a write i did months ago.. and one i read from MR Doc, i remember .. i enjoyed reading this.. it really seems that you have a strong feeling for your lover .. and that is why i like it ... good wording even though they were simple so keep writing and thanks for shairng and if you have time please take a look to my writing , i would really appreciate if i read your comment ... and that would help us a lot take care peace and love and have a nice day victor
I like this, It's simple but not dull, it's very bittersweet. I like that it didn't try to be deep, so many people try to force depth onto their writing that the end result makes no sense. It flowed well, good theme, something a lot of people can relate to. Well done
It was a really nice and sweet poem, and I guess it's inspired by personal feelings. I used to write a lot of poetry in a similar vein, but somehow these days I don't feel like writing anything about love anymore. Very nicely written, and keep up the good verse.