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    dots Submission Name: i wish i knew a pretty songdots

    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 824
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 530

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    dotsi wish i knew a pretty songdots

    i wish i knew a pretty song
    that i could sing to you.
    some special words of love and joy,
    so we can start anew.
    i wish i knew a story
    to tell you every night;
    a sweet romantic story
    that would make your heart feel light.
    i wish i could write a poem -
    a verse to make you see
    that you mean more than all the world
    and all it holds to me.
    i wish i knew what i could do
    to make you feel the love for me
    i've always felt for you.

    Submitted on 2006-04-01 23:26:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awe shucks.. doesnt that just hit the spot hey.... really awesome poem man really well written and the feelings are really ringing true.. really clear
    KEEp sAFE
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]
      well nice work here , my friend it reminds me a write i did months ago.. and one i read from MR Doc, i remember .. i enjoyed reading this.. it really seems that you have a strong feeling for your lover .. and that is why i like it ... good wording even though they were simple so keep writing and thanks for shairng and if you have time please take a look to my writing , i would really appreciate if i read your comment ... and that would help us a lot
    take care
    peace and love
    and have a nice day
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. The context was very well written and everything flowed well. It is a sweet sentiment and very relatable. I hope to see more from you.
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I loved that. I'm a sucker for poems like this, more exactly right now probably.It had a great flow and I think it was awesomely written. Great job! Going on my favs.
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, It's simple but not dull, it's very bittersweet. I like that it didn't try to be deep, so many people try to force depth onto their writing that the end result makes no sense. It flowed well, good theme, something a lot of people can relate to.
    Well done
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by Sagirlie | [ Reply to This ]
      It was a really nice and sweet poem, and I guess it's inspired by personal feelings. I used to write a lot of poetry in a similar vein, but somehow these days I don't feel like writing anything about love anymore. Very nicely written, and keep up the good verse.
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]

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