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    dots Submission Name: Water Dungeondots

    Author: chocoboluvr
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/4
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       this is my first story so i hope ya like it

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    dotsWater Dungeondots

    THere lay before him the great leviathan.he unsheathed his sword and began to fight the beast. then before he knew it after the dragon charged at him it left a gash in his right arm. then he impaled the dragon with his blade and the dragon fell into a pit of darkness therefore Seran had prevailed ovr the beast. then he passed out over the dragon hoping he would not die.

    Submitted on 2006-04-01 23:49:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well what can i say? ... just a good begining for a good story . i would tell you soemthing .. first, try to think about wht you want to write and then how you will do it .. at the end ,, write it back,... becuase your writings are kind of disorganized or something like .. but i still think you hvae something good in your mind for this story.. keep writing and thanks for sharing ... i would really appreciate it if you come by and check out my writings leving a comment...
    peace and love
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    and have a nice day
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]

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