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    dots Submission Name: Dead Livingdots
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    Author: AngelOutlaw
    ASL Info:    21/female/OR & WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 672/392/64
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 1001
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    Bytes: 312



    Description:
       There's a difference between being dead and being lifeless. I am the latter.


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    dotsDead Livingdots
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    Breathless.
    Heart stopped.
    Eyes rolled back.
    Arms and legs still.
    Mouth hung open.
    Brain silent.
    Dead.

    Hopeless.
    Heart empty.
    Spirit has abandoned.
    Reason to love, gone.
    Mind has deserted.
    Soul forsaken.
    Lifeless.




    Submitted on 2006-04-02 03:39:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is going on my fave list. i never thought of it like that. it's pretty short but it speaks volumes. i guess i've been lifeless a few times in my life or maybe i was just being melodramatic. whatever. great time babe
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      ....I see the meaning of the whole dead theme...
    but the poem seems a bit lazy....
    It's very short, seems a little decent...
    just put some more attention towards
    words of the poem...
    -nik
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]
      You are not lifeless, Hannah! You are one of the most vibrant, lively people I know. I know that yo *feel* lifeless, but I have come to realize that knowledge is often more important than feelings. But either way, I'm not going to tell you what to feel or what to know. Just remember, I've felt as lifeless as you do, and I love you I'm here to talk to if you want. You have my number.

    See you on Monday!
    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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