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    dots Submission Name: Some onedots
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    Author: muhammed
    ASL Info:    23/male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 87/124/111
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 208
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1004



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       that was my first writing my very first ..the fisrt time i hold the pen to write ..enjoy and tell me what you think ..


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    dotsSome onedots
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    Some one

    empty heart search in the faces
    for some one to love
    some one to hold
    some one to care

    someone I could turn to
    when life seems so blue

    I need some one to need me
    some one to complete me
    I need a heart of gold
    never let me full

    I need hold to hold me
    some hand to put around me
    some heart to hide in
    when I trembling

    I need a star to guide me
    someone beside me
    share my laughs and cry
    some one to believe me lie

    some one take me with every breath
    wear me like a dress
    some one ...
    but he doesn't exist

    some angel.... but it’s not for me
    some miracle I could never see

    I spend my life searching in the faces
    for some one to say I love you to
    for some one I could turn to
    when life...
    Turns away




    Submitted on 2006-04-02 05:32:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it`s a really nice poem ...i liked this part
    I need a star to guide me
    someone beside me
    share my laughs and cry
    some one to believe me lie

    keep on the good work

    i`ll add it 2 my favs ;)
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by mystic_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way the emotions were poured out here.i felt the longing.'some angel.... but it’s not for me,some miracle I could never see'.i loved those lines.^_^.some of the flows were a bit troubling though,a little revising would do.i lke the message.
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]



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