These Haiku's are very well written especially for them being your first ones. I especially like the first one best. It reminds me of summers at my old house when we would pick the cherries off of the trees. keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
oooh your haikus are so prettyyyy, i liked reading about the flowers and such, though it feels the second line in the second piece should mention something about roots, dince it starts all dark earthy.. but whatever sounds fine. I enjoy the haiku limitation a lot myself. ^_^ peace and love. -rue
I liked this very much. I think your third one was not as strong as the others though. They were all beautiful. I loved the first one best. I think you did really good for stringing them all together. Love is like a flower. And it is up to us how it grows in out lives. Good write.
So sorry I took so long to get back to you but I was rather busy, but I here now.
Hmmm... interesting a haiku chain, nice. But change the title you don't have to have 3-haiku up there, you could just leave the title as is. Also the lines don't have to be independent statements but they can actually flow into each other allowing for a better read and flow.
For e.g Crystal Clear Waters Run Into Endless Valleys With God's Living Flow
I gave you a snap shot of what I wanted you to see with a nice little flow rather than independent statements about the same thing. It always good to experiment with haiku a little and with poetry on the whole.
Regardless it was a very good attempt for your first try at the art. Keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day.
Chrystine I really like this one I am not sur and please forgive me if im nitpicking but dosent the 2nd line of poem 1 have 8 beats instead of 7 Either way it dosent matter This poem is a beutiful perception of nature God Bless Ron
This is definitely different, but in a good way! It's not the average poem you see everyday. Most of them are about love angst, and death. But this was a very nice change, and I love how you took a different attempt at the theme of love.
I'm not that great at comments, but I wanted to let you know that I really like it.
I enjoyed every line and the way they do in fact hold their own. That was quite a feat in and of itself. You've painted some beautiful pictures in my mind's eye.. and while reading.. this line became true > "A smile pollinates my heart"- I love the feeling that particular line gives me.
"Damp dark earth births light seekers" was nice also.
And, the last one was a nice way to wrap it up.. with friends as a flower garden of love.
line 1 has 6 syllables.. perhaps change "awake" to "wake".