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    dots Submission Name: Neildots
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    Author: victoriamills88
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       ok you can probably tell i was a little messed up when i wrote this! written after an experience i had last summer..think it speaks for itself.


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    Coming to, I looked around
    My stranger had gone
    But left his mark
    My trousers down
    And bruises fresh
    Bite marks
    And scars
    Inside my mind
    And on my legs
    Broken cursing visions spilling out of my head
    And the blood of lust left slowly staining
    My hands shaking
    I curled up small
    And silently making
    A quiet ball
    I lay empty and hollow
    And for all my pride
    I couldn’t swallow




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