Description: i wrote this when i was in texas. my parents were thinking about getting divorced and i was also thinking about this being my last year in high school and whatever...
Now that I’m a man I have so many decisions to make
Try not to envision my fate or worry about the destruction collisions create
Got college next year
Gotta think of careers
All I wanna do is influence my peers
Through the flows that flow through their ears
With family it’s all for one
And one for all like the Three Musketeers
But people change over time
My life’s on a decline if they choose to go the whole nine
Protect your brothers, I don’t have to console mine
Because emotions are held completely in check
Reject feelings that may pose a threat to us yet
Reactions are never forced, but of course
A lot of y’all know what it’s like when your parents are divorced
The walls around my soul are reinforced
Drown the world with music
But sometimes I peruse it to use skits
Use the world’s bits and pieces
To make opinions about the beginning
When men lived in peace without any sinning
Growing up is part of the cycle
And after you die remains are recycled
To make the next generations of babies and maybe
They can make the world better for us
So for now I guess it’s my decision to trust
both verse one and verse two are phenominal. Your rythym and flow was fantastic, but I prefered verse two over verse one because I found the flow to be more steady. I'll be reading more of your stuff as time progresses.
wow this was I guess more emotional then some of your writes but it wasn't my favorite of yours, I Just kinda felt like you sacrificed some of your usually perfect wording for the emotion, but then agian the emotion and insight made up for that. You're right, we all gotta grow up sometime but when you find yourself being hit straight on with tons of choices you don't wanna make and responsibilities/burdens that you could really deal without it does feel like it would be nice to be younger again. keep writing em, jess
It seems this one was very personal to you. I felt that you were expressing the huge amount of stress you seem to be under. You spoke of all the things that burden you, yet you seem detached in a way from this piece. Your flow was a little choppy. But your rhyming was very good. and you did connect all your thoughts together to make a nice song. I thought maybe this could of been longer, maybe told the reader other kinds of decisions that you must ponder on daily. I think that this was very effective in the sense you showed that young people do in fact have the world on their shoulders. This was very good. Just improve the flow and maybe add more to this. It eneded to soon for me.
Your insight was so true on this one. Everyone has those decisions to make the put us on our own path, it s CRAZY how some paths we take our soo much alike. My divorced parents [censored]ed me up, but at least i was a freshman when it happened. I was at least able to judge them accordingly with a half-mature mind. Although it was hard to trust anyone after that. Til this day i wonder what would be different if they got back together. But i accepted it and of course every situation is circumstancial but i also feel that if two people fight and seem miserable or if one of them does, then negativity will surround their lives. And divorce is sometimes the right thing to do. Cuz i stil got love from both of em.
Your lyrics were on point. You kept it simple but deep. PC PC
HEY TROY!! how is troy!! r u good troy??!!! hehe! this is good! um... my parents aint gettin no divorce so i cant help u their! well at least i think theyre not! well i already told dem if they did im going to canada!! so [censored] that!! anyway it wasnt as long as some of da otha stuff u write YAY!! um... lemme see is there anything else o yes it was very good i dunno if i said that already and i dont feel like lookin up 2 see if i did! good job! BYE TROY! ~akaila~
hey babe, i loved this, your flow was fab as ever. i know what your going through, i went through it myself, a year or two ago, its a real reality check when you find two important people in your life split, and you find yourself more inderpendant, its also a scary time, gonna add to ma favs, keep em cummin kyrenia x x x x
Submission Name: decisions (verse 1)
