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    dots Submission Name: suicidal symphonydots
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    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotssuicidal symphonydots
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    As I conduct the ivory keys,
    All I think about is how I want to be free,
    There is only one escape,
    But itís such horrid fate,

    Ill cut my wrist,
    Then by death be kissed,
    So I can spend eternity,
    Writing my suicidal symphony,

    As the woodwinds chime in,
    I ponder if I picked the right way to begin,
    The starting of my afterlife,
    Maybe it shouldnít begin with so much strife,

    Then the brass instruments start to play,
    And they seem to say,
    I should die by stopping my breath,
    It is a perfect calm death,

    The percussions then play the last beat,
    Then I walk up the stairs to finally meet,
    My way into the life beyond,
    Now with the noose secure I canít abscond,

    And in my last breath I see,
    Iíve already written my suicidal symphony,
    But no one shall ever hear,
    The music I hold so dear.....





    Submitted on 2006-04-02 16:50:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      welll it was an ok wriitng for me , as darkness said it started slow and became faster and faster and i gues that is why i like this writing i can relate to this .. becuase i wrote something similar few months ago.. it was about suicidal notes lol.. well keep writing and thanks for sharing and if you have time please take a loook to my writing and leave a comment i would really appreciate it ... becuase comments help us a lot
    peace and love
    take care
    and have a nice day
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      classic suicide...
    coool suicidel symphony
    it was soothing in an peaceful wayy
    it started slow then fast and then .....


    awsome rite

    Queen Draknessss of the grim Draco
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, I can't explain how into this one I got, f.ucking amazing hun, I loved it, definatly a fave add. I totally heard--felt--this one, like I was thinking it and a scene was playing out in my mind of a guy who wanted his death to mean more then his life did, and when he finally achieves it, there's no proof, no one else will know, and the memory of it, the purpose he finally found, will dissolve as soon as his heart stops beating. I dunno, I got more out of it then I could say, it was oddly beautiful and I will definatly have to read many more writes from you,
    peace,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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