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    dots Submission Name: Heaven is Where I Want to Be.dots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       This came to me while I was reading a book. Its about a serial killer who preys on children. Sadly, alot the murders mentioned in the book really happened. It tears my heart up to think of all the cruelties some children have to go through. I don't know why I was inclined to right this, I usually don't write of such tragedy and such. This one just stuck with me, so I decided to write it.

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    dotsHeaven is Where I Want to Be.dots

    I wake in the night to the sound of a voice,
    A little girl stands at the door.
    I motion for her to come sit by me.
    Her clothes are tattered and worn.

    Sitting by me, head lowered and still,
    She speaks without moving her lips.
    She tells me of how she was abused,
    Punished with words and whips.

    She tells me she is eleven years old,
    And was beaten since she was five.
    Endured more than any child should,
    And still, the suffering thrives.

    Her parents are saddened and miss her so,
    They cry rivers, oceans of sorrow.
    She asks me to help her to tell them of her.
    She would be twelve tomorrow.

    Knowing what it is I must do,
    I pick up the phone and dial.
    She tells me the man's name,
    Waves and leaves carrying a sweet smile.

    I tell her parents, and the police,
    That she came to me in the night.
    I tell them how it was she was killed,
    And she says she is all right.

    All of their eyes fill up with tears
    As I tell them of her death
    I speak the words the came out of her last
    Before she took her last breath.

    "I know I am going to die here
    I know what will happen to me
    Just watch over my mom and dad
    When I die, Heaven is where I want to be."

    Of all the murders comitted,
    Children are targeted more oft.
    Why does this happen to the innocent?
    When will the killing stop?

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      its a great write to think about.. But not.
    it should not be ignored but the topic is so hard to imagine becuz of the cruel concept of it all. Your wording was well thought out and structured. Flow wasnt perfect but i liked it.
    Keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      love it... its so very true what happends especially in todays world and what goes on. very strong words and imagery.. just plays it perfectly.. keep writing and especially about the things that matter...
    kEEP SAFe
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with slits-n-fits. It gave me the chills even after the first three lines. It's a sad conundrum why it seems that many of the young, mainly children, are subject to such cruelties so early in life. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]

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