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    dots Submission Name: Couldn't Really Saydots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I did actually have a dream just like this one. Except I remembered it. Another difference, in my dream, I saw myself and tried to go hold the other me, but every step I took only set me farther back from the me I had found. Confusing? You bet. Can't really make out if it were to mean something... but I wrote about it anyway.

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    dotsCouldn't Really Saydots

    Lost in a house, old and creepy
    I am searching for something unknown
    I go room to room looking around
    Found nothing or no one, I am still alone

    The house is large and has many rooms,
    This place is cold and barely lit
    The first floor searched and bare
    As dark as an abandoned pit

    My thoughts are few and far between
    As I take the stairs to the next floor.
    I can't figure out what I am looking for
    Hallway reveals more doors.

    Why am I here? What do I seek?
    My thoughts begin to race
    The thing I want, desire, need
    Will I find it in this place?

    In the last room, at the end of the hall
    In the corner, I see someone, holding theirself tight
    The face looks up and tears fall off
    I freeze in shock of the sight.

    Its me, myself, and I in that corner
    Lost, scared, and crying
    Finally found myself, in this place
    After so many years of trying

    I see the sun rise at the window
    But shadows take over the room
    I turn and run down the hall
    Leaving the other me with the gloom

    I wake up, alone in my bed
    To the sound of the alarm beeping
    Trying hard to remember what it was
    I was seeing while I was sleeping.

    The memory of the dream was gone
    And I go to start my day
    Feeling like I was missing something
    But couldn't really say

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    ||| Comments |||
      i like the comparison to a house. and searching through the house that is your soul. different rooms and whatnot.

    i agree with sandman.
    good write.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very good and as you say its about a dream alot of good stories come from dreams wether they are thought about when were sleeping or traveling day to day its all good just like yors

    great read

    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      dreams are a great place to get inspiration right? I liked the theme of finding yourself without knowing what you are looking for.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

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