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    dots Submission Name: My Reflection I hatedots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       I wrote this a few months ago. Lost a few pounds since then =P Still feel this way most times though.


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    dotsMy Reflection I hatedots
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    I love who I am, its my reflectoin I hate.
    I knew I shouldn't have cleaned my plate.
    Is there any way I can compensate,
    For all the junk food I just ate?
    How can I change this fatty fate?
    I could workout and lift weights.
    But I am afraid its almost too late.
    My body is my worse trait.
    I love who I am, its my reflection I hate.




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      I don't actually think I am fat. This was written to show others how they sometimes make me think. I have no problem with my body, I have a problem with society thinking I am not as attractive as I should be because I am not pencil thin. But thanks for the advice. And no, this isn't a writing that cries for attention, its more like "see what your words do to me inside?" I stated in the poem, its the inside I love, and by hating whats outside, society is tearing up what it is I love about myself. The mutilate my love for who I am. Its not about me needing to lose weight or wanting to kill myself because of how I look. Nothing like that.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm... I like this, its almost comical the way you wrote it but I don't think it was meant to be funny. You have a difficulty accepting your outer appearance because you say your fat. You seem to have no problems with your inner person, that is, your personality or whatever but you just can't seem to get over how you look.

    My advice to you is pray. Yes pray. Pray to the Lord above to help you in your time of need. Help you to resist the temptations of over eating or gluttony. Ask him to help you to stick to a diet or start a diet or whatever you need to lose those extras few pound that you will able to gain the appearance you desire.

    But I must tell you that despite the fact that you may be overweigh, because of your personality you find individuals will like and love you for who you are rather than how you look. Plus there is more of you to love.

    This was a very nice little write, keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      We view ourselves only by the concepts of reflected glass. It was the reaction of others towards overweight people that has engraved our minds and has lead us to believing that something is wrong with those who are obese.
    Your persona says so much more than your appearance, as long as you realize that, you will gain the confidence you need. Noone deserves to sit in front of a mirror and say to themselves, " I hate how I look". Who is the one you made you feel that way, when you were younger I know thats not what you were saying to yourself, because you werent old enough to realize that.
    Everyone is who they are because that's how god made themand how your life was intended to be, and if you think thats not how you should look then tell me how you should, there is no right way to look. Remeber that everyone has that soemthing that will make them distinguished and unique. Live up your uniqueness to the fullist and trust that you will be recognized. I loved the poem by the way, only because it was honest.

    -Know, don't fear, just know that you will die someday...
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL. This is so cute! :) You have a totally fresh way of writing about dieting. :) And I love the fact that you rhymed the whole thing.

    Tiny complaints - spelling errors. In the 1st and 7th lines, "its" should be "it's" and "reflection", well, I'm betting it's a typing mistake. :)

    Other than that, nicely written! I can almost imagine the tune that goes with it. Why don't you try writing a whole song? This could be the chorus.

    Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      How witty!! This is absolutely ingenius!! In other words, you love your personality, your charm, your inner-self, however, you hate your outer appearance. Is that what you're saying? This truly has a million impacts in such few little words!! Great job!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Mr. Amateur | [ Reply to This ]


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