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    dots Submission Name: I rememberdots
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    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 86/79/89
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 300
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       Where are you now?!


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    dotsI rememberdots
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    I sit here and I look through the photos
    I remember the kisses and the hugs
    The truth of how we were devoted
    To eachother and it seemed like forever and above

    I think of the room we shared
    the times that we held eachother in our arms
    were we thought we would be together forever
    now it all seems so far.

    I can't help but see the way you smiled
    The way you kept me laughing with every chance you got
    The way you would make me feel better
    When I would be distraught.

    I remember when we lived together,
    and when we had our quarrels,
    but what I choose never to forget
    is the ultimate love we shared for eachother it showed how much we cared.




    Submitted on 2006-04-03 13:17:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awwww. This was very emotional. It shows the pain, and questions that go through a person's mind while they sit and thin about a passed love. It is truely beautiful. I hope to never have to feel your pain, to share your memories. I've been with my boyfriend for about 5 months now and i know i will never be able to love anyone more than him. I wish you the best of luck. Really do keep righting. You show much talent and originality.

    Akai_ame
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      This is ..... wow. I love the wording you put into your writing, especially when it is about me, O.o

    I am where I have always been, in your mind and in your heart, and you'd think that I would have realised that before it was too late. I'll admit, I am a selfrightous often pompus [censored], but one day I shall atone for what I've done and hopefully I can forgive myself, and maybe beyond that be forgiven by those who have felt my bite.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful
    It really is nice when we have beautiful memories we can look back at to bring us to some of the happier times in life
    You wrote this well
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwww...how sad...but sometimes, good memories can save your life. (Sorry, I watched "The Punisher" last night, HA!) Well, I say its sad because of the fact that something like this had to be written. It sounds like a situation where what you say in the description is a question that shouldnt have to be spoken if it indeed was all about true love, ya know?

    I dont know if you meant "eachother" to be one word as far as symbolizm goes, but if not, they should have a space. But I think it does work well as far as the symbolizm thing goes to leave them connected like that. Brilliant if that was your intent. And the last line seems to be missing an "enter key" spot there somewhere.

    Anyway, just my thoughts. A very well written piece.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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