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    dots Submission Name: nothing else mattersdots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsnothing else mattersdots

    Look into my eyes tell me I don't want to die.
    my life has fallen through the depth of beyond.
    Crying for help, but no one is there.
    Asking myself, does anyone care.
    you always looking at me like the outcast,
    I'm always running from my past.
    It seems I found the road to nowhere.
    Does any one care?
    Will someone bare arms for me?
    Or can they not see in my eye that I want to die.
    Im looking down now that its over,
    the cuts on my wrist are too deep.
    Reflecting on all of my mistakes,
    I thought I found the road to somewhere but it just led me to a u turn.
    that just lead me to more pain and despair.
    Nothing Else matter,
    I can't take this no more.
    I regret every breath I take,
    Everything I do is a mistake
    I feel so week and unable
    My knees tremble.
    I've surpassed my breaking point.
    the next time you will see me again is going into the ground 6 ft deep.
    I'll Make sure Ill have no regrets,
    Because tomorrow I won't wake up.

    Submitted on 2006-04-03 16:28:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was cool .. not bad nor good .. wel i think you used many clich words.. as
    "Crying for help, but no one is there.
    Asking myself, does anyone care.
    you always looking at me like the outcast,
    I'm always running from my past.
    It seems I found the road to nowhere."


    "the cuts on my wrist are too deep"....
    and stuff like that i know you could use another way top say the same thing not a common one .. because people may confuse this as cheating or something keep writing and thanks for sharing
    and if you have time pleae take a loook to my writing andleave a comment i would really appreciate it ..
    takee care
    peace and love
    and have a nice day

    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very deep and emotianl yet beautiful piece. Very depressed and sad indeed. I will have to say it's more of a poem then lyrics. It doesn't flow like a song but it flows like a poem.

    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      hm...its cool.
    i like it. i had a feeling it was lyrics and yea, it goes good that way.
    it kinda reminds me of some of my stuff yet seems you're trying too hard for it to rhyme.
    but its pretty good with the feeling.
    Keep Writing.
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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