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Author: Poeticprincess ASL Info:    18/f/Germany Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104 Words: 89

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It's all too damn superfical we date yet we're not offical we talk..never mind we just fuck around and you're only happy when i'm going down what was once love has turned to hate on my side soul mates just dissapate i hate being the other woman stop doing her wrong why come to me if your love's so strong your jealous...but then u don't love me it's getting kinda hard you see you really messed up my flow so i guess it's time i let u go .

Submitted on 2006-04-03 18:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It's all too damn superfical we date yet we're not offical what was once love has turned to hate on my side soul mates just dissapate those are some tight ass lines. it's about time they started teaching u lil whipper snappers something in them schools. this one was alright. i'm sorry bout the whole guys equaling [censored]s thing. u should find a good one. might take a while though

| Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

I have been through pretty much the same thing... I have seen so much of that bull Sh*t It sucks... have a great day and keep writing. Samantha

| Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Sharati_hottie | [ Reply to This ]

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