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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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sooo yea a great person once said..guys can be assholes..i say they just don't know what they want? lol random poem from me..but yea it's been awhile.


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It's all too damn superfical
we date yet we're not offical
we talk..never mind we just fuck around
and you're only happy when i'm going down
what was once love has turned to hate
on my side soul mates just dissapate
i hate being the other woman stop doing her wrong
why come to me if your love's so strong
your jealous...but then u don't love me
it's getting kinda hard you see
you really messed up my flow
so i guess it's time i let u go
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Submitted on 2006-04-03 18:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's all too damn superfical
we date yet we're not offical

what was once love has turned to hate
on my side soul mates just dissapate

those are some tight ass lines. it's about time they started teaching u lil whipper snappers something in them schools. this one was alright. i'm sorry bout the whole guys equaling [censored]s thing. u should find a good one. might take a while though
| Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I have been through pretty much the same thing... I have seen so much of that bull Sh*t It sucks...

have a great day and keep writing.

Samantha
| Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Sharati_hottie | [ Reply to This ]


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