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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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something unexpected


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It's just like a man..to cheat on you
you've given him the best years (or in my case 1 year in some months.)
and he treats you like dirt.
It's just like a man to leave you waiting
four hours for a phone call u don't get
Its just like a man to treat u like shit (privately)
but in public treat u like a queen
It's also just like a man......
to kiss you when your sad
give you flowers for no reason
call you just because
give you those sweet little hugs
write you notes
cuddle infront of his homies..
it's just like a man to love you




Submitted on 2006-04-03 18:38:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  God damn men anyways. I like the poem, but the slang typing takes away from it. I recommend exchanging the "u"'s for yous and taking out the 1st part put in brackets, while taking the second pair of brackets out and leaving in privately.
Also, the swearings a little rough. The poem doesnt seem ANGRY enough for vulgar words, so maybe instead of [censored], use dirt?

Anyways,
Good start!
-Ann
| Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
  Having a title would b nice. :p That aside, the ending really is unexpected. Still, to my understanding, I trust that such characteristics apply to both genders. So, better to have be open-minded on such things. ^_^
| Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]
  nice transition with this one. i thought this one was just gonna be another poem bashing men and all the terrible things we do to women. but u switched it up nicely. ur write. we're like yin and yang. the balance of good and evil. we do a bit of both
| Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I this is nice, I like the way you made the switch from good men to bad. I don't think I have a favorite part but if I did it would be: It's just like a man to leave you waiting
four hours for a phone call u don't get
Its just like a man to treat u like [censored] (privately)
but in public treat u like a queen
It's also just like a man......
to kiss you when your sad
give you flowers for no reason
| Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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