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    dots Submission Name: Don't Oil the Hingesdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDon't Oil the Hingesdots
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    Our front door makes a dismal sigh everytime you leave.
    Somehow the sound becomes joyous when you return,
    And I'm glad you put off things.
    You can unclog the drain,
    but please don't oil the hinges
    for somehow that annoying squeak
    has become linked in my mind
    to your embrace.





    Submitted on 2004-05-06 04:34:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      such sounds can be quite scary when it's night and you're alone. but when you can hear in this way that someone loved comes home it's just great. beautiful expressed. a great little love poem.
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      One of the best you've written that i've read. I don't have to tell you why. Personally, though, I'm so lacking in sentimentality that I'd tell my mate oil the damm thing anyway.
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      I used to feel that way about a squeeky step. I could always hear anyone climbing the steps. It always made me feel safe knowing that no one could sneek up on me when I was alone in the house.

    Isn't it funny that even sounds can remind us of people?
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      AN ingenius way...I've only had one cup of coffee so far...sorry
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      As usual, a very nice piece of work from you! This was very comfortable and harmonious...a ingenius way to say "I Love You" in a different form
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      "I can relate! Great write! Love the [[flow, wording, rhyme]]. You rock!!!" = Bad comment. So what Bob, good poem! You know how some pictures just tickle in the right places? THis did for me, we live in an old house that creaks and sighs. Lovely picture and I like the positive feel linked to the annoyance.
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      Doors, like mortals, do speak in different timbres--according to the direction they are taking. This is , once more, simply lovely. I hope you submit something sloppy soon, I need something to make a positive suggestion about...your consistent excellent endeavor makes me feel a failure at critique. Lovely, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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