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    dots Submission Name: unbreakable(the lost verse)dots
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    Author: PROlifik
    ASL Info:    23/m/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.01 - 23/28/21
    Words: 443
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 967
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2453



    Description:
       a lost verse from unbreakable..a song i did with SINceer05


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    dotsunbreakable(the lost verse)dots
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    purposly hurting me thats certainly not getting you anywhere permantly
    personaly you havent seent he worst of me
    just about a third of me wishes we were what we used to be
    before you got used to me and used me everything you say is news to me
    so let me explain this to you,just before i blame it on you
    just think what its like one time for it to rain on you
    let me bring this pain on you,you would act insanely too
    you continue to re-open scabs just to expose wounds
    just as i resume you realize there scars- so now you wanna see me soon
    from friendly adivice thats just what i asume,even tho i miss the smell of your purfume
    i aint givin myslef that much room to move i cant just lose i just refuse to be used i'll stand on my own two as the accused
    you aint gotta pretend i know there your friends in the meantime i've cut ends
    " i'll never make ammends with them or defend them,seems like whatever i do offends them"
    ok then...i'll be there when ya luck ends
    those were true quotes,i was there when your turth spoke like your truce broke
    now its me you choose to pervoke??
    so heres my letter,just give me a minute let me get it together
    im still trying to recall everything i remember
    i just want to show you im doing a lil better,finding it easier to cope
    you've never read anything i wrote so here it is outlined in this envelope
    everything in this rhyme i hope it reaches you just fine
    fucks with you inside so dont let your pride be blind you know you think about me all the time i remain on your mind
    hasnt changed since the break up you fake create the make up-just to cause a shake up
    your just dreamin please-wake up i can see the real you under your make up
    not one to react rap about females on wax but its a must i expose you on this track
    let the public know the facts of your acts while the rest just turned there backs
    heart turned black- fiend for drama so much ya arms showed tracks
    so just know that,that one lil piece of me you no longer hold that or own that im over that
    put it all past me,its past me but i promise you-you havent seen the last of me
    so let the pastor preach im higher than you bastards can reach
    so you can call off your search,you can find me +on my way to church+




    Submitted on 2006-04-04 04:55:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was tight....in some places I did kind of get lost....or felt kind of like I was drifting.....

    Other then just them FEW places...you did your thing and you spit to the fullest. I think that you have found your talent. Never force the rhyme....let the rhyme take over you.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, i agree with sin that it is real deep, kinda scared me that a lad can feel so much hatred for an ex love, but it was good, luvin it,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      damn
    this is a deep verse, it wouldve made the track. MOs definetly, You kept it real and raw, a little bitter(ha), but i talented [censored] none the less.

    SInCeerly
    SIN
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      it packed a big hit-and how smooth-
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]


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