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    dots Submission Name: Don't save medots
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    Author: ellesmera
    ASL Info:    18. Female. England
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 43/263/115
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1026
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1385



    Description:
       this is......dark. thats about it...lol


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    dotsDon't save medots
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    Teetering over the top,
    Of a mountain,
    Of lies,
    Iím waiting to crumble,
    Expecting the tumble,
    The suspense is killing me,
    Literally.

    No room for truth,
    No space for bravery,
    No seat for you,
    No one,
    To save me,
    I live up there,
    Along with the clouds of dread,
    And deceit.

    I've lived a lie,
    For so long that I,
    Have forgotten what it means to live,
    No one will save me,
    Its all my fault,
    I dug this hole myself,
    Now I'm waiting,
    For someone,
    To pull the trigger.


    Set me free from this nightmare,
    Let me live,
    A life thatís free,
    Let me love,
    Something true,
    Even if you have to kill me,
    I need to be released,
    From this pain I feel inside.

    Don't save me,
    don't try to help me,
    i don't need an arm to lean on,
    i don't want to carry on,
    this life,
    is all to much,
    this feeling,
    as been tampered with,
    for too long now.

    i don't want to feel your tender touc,
    i can't bear to let you know,
    i don't need tis life now,
    but you need to learn,
    to let go................





    Submitted on 2006-04-04 08:09:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well I consider it very happy well not the sense of happiness but you know happy. Well I don't think you will understand.


    Fana
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty free,portrayed emotions..

    liked these lines:

    I've lived a lie,
    For so long that I,
    Have forgotten what it means to live.

    i wonder who you don't want to save you..oh well.you could add a little more details.
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]


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