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    dots Submission Name: Memoriesdots
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    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 86/79/89
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 342
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1327



    Description:
       past memories of a long lost love


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    dotsMemoriesdots
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    looking through my hope chest,
    I see
    all of our great past memories

    Seeing us as how we were,
    I knew
    that we would be together for life

    Showing myself our pictures taken at school,
    I cry
    because I remember everything we once had

    taking Everything of us out of this chest,
    I noticed
    We have more memories I have chosen to forget

    I look at the CD with your favorite song,
    I know
    "Why Can't I" is always what it will be

    I look through our memories that we have had,
    I see
    that if I look again, I know I won't make it though

    I will have to stop myself to make a call,
    to you
    because I know that I won't be able to take it anymore

    It's almost unbearable now, I can feel the pain,
    I see
    Myself welling up, its almost hear now

    I look at myself in the mirror now,
    I cry
    I see the tears pour from my eyes

    I remember everything now,
    I try
    to forget the pain, the angst, the hurt the battles

    It doesn't help, They won't go away now,
    Im done
    I can't live with out this love of yours I seek.




    Submitted on 2006-04-04 12:55:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You still have those pictures? I haven't seen mine since about 3 weeks after you left. I almost forgot that we had taken a bunch in rose's photo class. it seems like it was so long ago, and yet, it also seems like it was just yesterday. We are a bit toched in the head there friend. did you ever email my song to me? After reading this I really want hear it. Whatever you do, please don't destroy those pictures. I know the memories hurt, but smile, it's hump day
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, but the thing I would change would the the use of the word 'now' so much. It just doesn't go with the poem, and to me feels repetitive. Other than that I really like it. I can relate to this in a way. But not so in depth like this. If ya know what I mean. I hope you can over come this and find love.

    Mikki
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]



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