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    dots Submission Name: theftdots
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    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1000
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 803



    Description:
       I was Bored in school. I was just kinda writing off the top of my head. Don't exactly know why I wrote this or where my motivation came from.


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    dotstheftdots
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    Life is hard,
    That's what they say,
    But you don't know hardship
    Till you've lived life my way.

    There's no such thing
    As happiness and pleasure;
    I'll fill your life
    With pain beyond measure.

    I'll draw you in close
    And play and pretend.
    I'll intice and seduce,
    Your will I'll bend.

    Your dreams and thoughts
    I will haunt,
    Untill I take from you
    Whatever I want.

    Your mind, your body,
    Your being, your soul,
    I'll take it from you,
    I'll take it all.

    Before you know it,
    You'll have nothing left.
    You won't know what hit you;
    I am the love theft.




    Submitted on 2006-04-04 13:15:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW! Simply put, I don't think I could ever related to this poem, and when I clicked on it, I thought that It was about soemthing completely different than what it is. I was astonished with the imagery to this pecific poem, I began to think somewhere in the middl ethat you were forcing your rhyming, but then it all started to flow again so... maybe it was on purpose... I hope that you have a better chance at love... and don't end up down the wrong path... I have taken that path and it is not one easily gotten off of. anyways, have a great day and keep writing.

    Samantha
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Sharati_hottie | [ Reply to This ]


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