Description: I wrote this about a woman I met about six months ago who wanted me to go out with her- but I couldnt because she was just so damn ignorant.
Shush now. Adults are talking. -------------------------------------------
I find your phases
Deathdefying
For all your graces and your crying
Only
Ali
Enate me, stranger.
You see…
That silver spoon stuck up your ass-
And I don’t mean to be crass
Or be a dick
But you should quit
With all your whining
I am sick
And tired of your pining
For what you lost
You have no clue
The cost
Of really losing
Choosing
Between what matters
And what’s crazy
The crystal platters
You’ve been served with
Make it hazy.
Unchecked your ego brands
Your ignorance on the few
Who have restraint enough
To stay their hands
From slapping the BITCH out of you.
So
When next time you think you know
About something beyond your teaching
Just shut the fuck up, stupid,
Let it go
It’s a bit beyond your reaching.
This is so fantastic. Normally I dont favor this kidna of scattered rhymine but I absolutely loved this. I hate givign way short little comments such as this but I know its nice to get a compliment every now and then. So great job, this is a favorites and its nice to see you again friend.
I loved this poem, I don't think I could have ever written something so indepth and such. It's brilliant, like they say. The wording the feeling you get from it. My favorite part from this is "But you should quit With all your whining I am sick And tired of your pining For what you lost You have no clue The cost"
I think that is wonderful... Its true. I love this so much... Keep writing.
THIS WAS PRETTY BRILLIANT. I ENJOYED IT VERY MUCH! IT WAS SO UNIQUE THE WAY YOU PUT IT. IT WAS GREAT. I HATE IGNORANT PEOPLE TOO. BUT SOMETIMES LIKE YOU MEANT (I THINK) SOMETIMES THEY WERE JUST BROUGHT UP THAT WAY. GREAT WRITE -CHRISTINA AKA POETRY
This was absolutely brilliant! I really liked your poem, it was cool. I loved the part "The crystal platters You’ve been served with Make it hazy."
It's like your saying that it's not all her fault, that maybe it's her upbringing that made her this way...i might just be pulling that out of my ass, but hey, it's what i thought.
Submission Name: Shush now. Adults are talking.
