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    dots Submission Name: Disillusiondots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 691
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       wrote this while listening to alot of weird, trippy techno

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    Gaze fixated upwards
    Spiralling to the sky
    This, heart, this battlefield
    Division: you and I
    All these words without thoughts
    All these thoughts without words
    Dreams of boundless freedom
    Gone like the flocks of birds
    Breeze begins to lift us
    This desire, denial
    Ascension tells no lies
    Overcoming our trial
    Order amongst chaos
    Success amongst error
    Strip down to what is left
    The autumn moon is fairer

    One day I know we'll awaken
    Attempt to fix what is breaking
    Admit amourous travesties
    Scrawled out in bitter elegies
    What never was shall always be
    The blind eye turned shall always see
    Confessions forged with faulty ink
    Repaired within the broken link
    We look towards the sky again
    Tearing across the northern wind
    Without a doubt or second thought
    Grasping at lights we would have caught
    We descend and return to earth
    Eyes opening: A child at birth

    Submitted on 2006-04-04 16:15:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    You might have written this while listening to weird trippy techno, but there's nothing weird or trippy included in your write. As a matter of fact, you have a way of words with your flow. Like the ying and yang, with a lil touch of good and evil. You know a balance. I especially loved "the blind eye turned shall always see". How so true. You better continue to listen to your "weird trippy techno" because you are writing a "good flow" of words. Take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]

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