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The Evening Moon

Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
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Words: 80
Class/Type: Poetry /
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just a story about the moon

The Evening Moon

It lays there resting high in the sky
softly glowing a circle of bright light
shimmering so in our black shades
our lens painted by sites of trees swaying
dancing our bodies absorb the light
an owl silent as an indian hunter
raising its feathers its swoops, dives to its prey
the sun sleeps by its side
touching it gently giving it warmth
the moon the moon the moon
in its space it is blue

Submitted on 2006-04-04 18:09:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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