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    dots Submission Name: LIFE AKA "goodbye" (verse 1)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 392
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsLIFE AKA "goodbye" (verse 1)dots
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    when I die, I wanna be seen as me/
    not a white man in red, blue, or rockin a white tee/
    family, is forever AK till I die/
    I pray to got I get the chance to tell my people goodbye/

    what I think I feel/
    see what i feel is real/
    speaking what I believe and do/
    councel my beliefs as if I wanted it for you/
    like MLK when he spoke of his dream/
    mixed with malcom for lawlessness, it seems/
    I too have dream, among this living nightmare/
    it's sad, reality won't allow me to share/

    when I die, I wanna be seen as me/
    not a white man in red, blue, or a white tee/
    family, is forever AK till I die/
    I pray to got I get the chance to tell my people goodbye/

    life is one big game/
    two teams, both think the other's to blame/
    only in life, is a much bigger field/
    and when a game is lost you die, nothing to be concealed/
    not hiding or running, those people are cheaters/
    cheaters never win, or live, call me the reaper/
    if you win the game, you still die/
    but not like those who cheated, stole and lied/

    when I die, I wanna be seen as me/
    not a white man in red, blue, or rockin a white tee/
    family, is forever AK till I die/
    I pray to got I get the chance to tell my people goodbye/

    goodbye, little brother, I'm watching/
    take care of jonnie, be good to her I'm watching/
    Hood don't mean what he says when he playing/
    you like his bro. too, you know there'd be no delaying/
    he'll be there for you just me was/
    nothing gonna change, ya'll can be like we was/
    that shit we do to you, you might think we assholes/
    but in reality we wanna help you to guide yo's/
    please man, don't get it twisted/
    I'm trying to teach something, if you get mad, you will've missed it/

    when I die, I wanna be seen as me/
    not a white man in red, blue, or rockin a white tee/
    family, is forever AK till I die/
    I pray to got I get the chance to tell my people goodbye/







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      This rap is hot and had some good rhymes. I understand what you saying to the fullest. I feel you, the flow was consistent too, so nice job.

    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah this was great but my fav parts were the hook and the last verse. I get the strong semblance of family and like wanting to take care of them and tell them goodbye and everytin. Great write. Later.

    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      this is pretty good. i've seen better but better than some of the stuf i've been reading lately from you. i'm feeling the hook too. i know what ur saying. that's why i just strive to be my own person instead of following the crowd wherever they go
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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