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    dots Submission Name: Dissatisfieddots
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    Author: The41stSmibble
    ASL Info:    19 male england
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 41/60/15
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 233
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 648



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       From a distance; judge how you will!


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    Smiling, and laughing;
    are we all disatisfied,
    looking away
    she's here to stay
    both looking at the clear blue sky

    Turning away and crying;
    are we this disatisfied,
    do we do
    what we wanted to
    concieving a kiss, if only you tried

    Amoungst the riches;
    can we be disatisfied,
    for gold is cheap
    their will is weak
    because i'll live with you as mine

    dont interupt me

    standing aloft;
    they're so satisfied,
    a shadow of you
    a silloutte of me
    and a memory that never died




    Submitted on 2006-04-04 19:51:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm, This is a good poem... I liked it, but... I think that it could have flowed better. Rhyming seemed like it could have been forced... I liked the poem though... Keep writing though.

    Samantha
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Sharati_hottie | [ Reply to This ]



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