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    dots Submission Name: Toasted Trannydots
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    Author: cerberus74
    ASL Info:    32 f uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 70/37/41
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 1245
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1486



    Description:
       Cars...... tut


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    dotsToasted Trannydots
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    My carís a wreck
    My hairs a mess
    I dont' possess a single dress!
    Ive got my spanner
    And me knife
    I'm fixing nuts and bolts of life!

    Up the bonnet
    Let me see!
    (hope that no ones watching me
    pretend to know what this thing is
    in front of me - the engine-ness
    is not my bag,
    but here we are
    I need to have a bloody car!)

    Oil and grease all over me clothes
    I look like a bloke in drag I s'pose
    Liberating stuff is this
    For a girl like me, in a place like this
    Slap me thigh and wink a wink
    ( bit o' crap in me eye I think)

    Slam the bonnet - start her up
    Chug Splat Chug Splat
    WhiZZ and PUrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!
    Then CHUG and splat and SPLAT and chug and CLANGGGG!.........
    (uncomfortable silent moment - then)
    !!!BANG!!! (loads of smoke and fire
    OH! - and a disappearing car)

    Two smoking boots are all that are left
    Kids are feeling quite bereft
    "Holy shit!" says Mrs Tindle
    "Oh dear me!" shouts Mrs Wimble

    A voice cries out from way up high
    Makes them look up... towards the sky
    (And there on the top of the B.T post
    theres a tranny looking like toast)

    "HEY! DONT CRY DONT SHOUT OR WAIL
    JUST FIND ME A BLOODY CAR FOR SALE!!"





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      I very much enjoyed reading this piece. Not only does it justifiably decribe certain feelings and thoughts that go through the mind of a transexual but it also does a wonderful job of drawing the reader in to see and feel what is going on, both in the narrators world as well as in the mind of the narrator. It also has a lovely comedic effect that i found enthralling!!! marvelous job and thank you for sharing!!!

    Meow!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      lol flippin heck your a comedian hahaha and a very imaginitive one an all......im going to stalk you.........i really love your style its going to be so refreshing to read your stuff.....that wink wink line and having a bit of crap in your eye had me in stitches lol....wow your a star
    God Bless
    Take Care
    Lotsaluv
    Nadine
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      haha haha ahaha man thats going on my favourites list... love it.. love it... how the hell did you come up with that man it was gold... genious... still laughing..
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]


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