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    dots Submission Name: blue sky foreverdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 652
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       Blue sky ...... imagine


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    dotsblue sky foreverdots
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    My love my life seems to live on
    Myself my wife i adore to live for
    Limits that is not reached till the end
    My friend my foe i find to survive for.

    Making this world that of an unique life form
    Am i that one or just one of all?
    Is this curse of the unknown so true?
    Find that i will death to fall.

    Infinite is the lifetime that is what i dream
    Dreams that are dreams true will be never
    Held in the sand in the air in the fire
    Till eternity will I be with the blue sky forever.




    Submitted on 2006-04-05 10:35:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a sweet poem. the only part i didn't like was
    "Find that i will death to fall."
    It was confusing and not clear at all.

    Nice job though.
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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