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Pieces of Me


Author: Emerging Soul
ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240 /1114 /244
Words: 95
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Not one of my best, I know...


Pieces of Me



I am lured today
By the demon inside
The voice that haunts me with silent questions
Nagging at the back of my mind
The prevailing sense of melancholy
That says, "who cares?"
and "what does it matter?"
and "will this ever end?"
The child inside
That wants to curl up and sleep
The wounded one that wants to weep
The restless one that wants to run like the wind
The decadent one that aches for sin
I stand back and watch this inner-me
And struggle for my sanity
Picking up the pieces
of me




Submitted on 2006-04-05 14:04:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You give yourself too little credit. This was actually quite sound both in reflection and insight. It is an eternal struggle which lives inside each one of us. All of the weapons the Enemy wields to distract us from faith were deployed in this write: discouragement, despair, hopelessness, and insignificance topped with temptation.

You made this poem sing with echoes of eternal longing and spiritual hunger planted deep within each of us.

Well done.
| Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
  So cleverly worded, my dear! I loved it! It was so acurate and so, precisely what goes on inside my mind at times! excellent capture of an idea! I'm jealous! I wish I could do that as well as you obviously can! kudos! good write, keep it up!
Jenn @>-->--
| Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked reading this piece and the flow is wonderful,You capture the the spirit within and the longing we each find within ourselves. So brilliantly worded and expressed. We have all struggled with faith I am sure, Your words cover many emotions in this write that we have all felt at one time or another in our lives. I truly enjoyed every word, This is one to add to my favs, what a beautiful and great write.

Ladymustang
| Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
  I know this well and am haunted by the tearful refrain that echos throughout this well crafted piece of hopelessness, abandonment and loss.

You have a sure hand, and are gifted with the ability to express yourself.
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by junemarie | [ Reply to This ]


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