Pieces of Me

Author: Emerging Soul ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240 /1114 /244 Words: 95

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Pieces of Me

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I am lured today By the demon inside The voice that haunts me with silent questions Nagging at the back of my mind The prevailing sense of melancholy That says, "who cares?" and "what does it matter?" and "will this ever end?" The child inside That wants to curl up and sleep The wounded one that wants to weep The restless one that wants to run like the wind The decadent one that aches for sin I stand back and watch this inner-me And struggle for my sanity Picking up the pieces of me

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You give yourself too little credit. This was actually quite sound both in reflection and insight. It is an eternal struggle which lives inside each one of us. All of the weapons the Enemy wields to distract us from faith were deployed in this write: discouragement, despair, hopelessness, and insignificance topped with temptation. You made this poem sing with echoes of eternal longing and spiritual hunger planted deep within each of us. Well done.

| Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

So cleverly worded, my dear! I loved it! It was so acurate and so, precisely what goes on inside my mind at times! excellent capture of an idea! I'm jealous! I wish I could do that as well as you obviously can! kudos! good write, keep it up! Jenn @>-->--

| Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]

I really liked reading this piece and the flow is wonderful,You capture the the spirit within and the longing we each find within ourselves. So brilliantly worded and expressed. We have all struggled with faith I am sure, Your words cover many emotions in this write that we have all felt at one time or another in our lives. I truly enjoyed every word, This is one to add to my favs, what a beautiful and great write. Ladymustang

| Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]

I know this well and am haunted by the tearful refrain that echos throughout this well crafted piece of hopelessness, abandonment and loss. You have a sure hand, and are gifted with the ability to express yourself.

| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by junemarie | [ Reply to This ]

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