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    dots Submission Name: my mumdots

    Author: okmayb
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/1/2
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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       this is dedicated to my mum who killed herself when i was 10 ,

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    dotsmy mumdots

    where did you go my loving heart
    you missed a beat ,now where apart
    you had to leave,i understand
    but now whos here, to hold my hand
    and so i go from day to day
    not ever knowing what to say
    i feel a loss i cant explaine
    like a summers day in pouring rain
    im holing on ! i dont know how
    i wish i had you near me now
    iv come so far through pain and tears
    yet you cant help me through my fears
    cos through your pain you went away
    and now my lonley heart must pay
    your preciouse love i cant replace
    my heart will always hold this space
    untill one day, when i might find
    a special love
    one real true kind

    Submitted on 2006-04-05 14:48:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it`s a very emotional piece..i know how u feel cuz i lost my mom when i was 10 too..it`s hard but we cant do anything ....
    good write u described how u feel in a simple words..
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by mystic_angel | [ Reply to This ]

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