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    dots Submission Name: As Once Was....dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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    Bytes: 486



    Description:
       Incessant rains - steady rains bring life but also can destruct and reshape the land -

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    dotsAs Once Was....dots
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    As once was the single drop
    is now a surging stream

    As once was the parched land
    is now a quenching drink

    As once was a sturdy climbing hill
    is now an erosive piece of yesterday

    and the rains continue
    to change the course
    of as once was
    to what "IT" is today

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    Submitted on 2006-04-05 15:06:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi long time, you have written alot since the last time i clicked on your page i will take time to read what i've missed.

    i havent been doing much other than work i dont spend much time with the writing anymore i think i'm loosing interest and asking myself whats the point
    everything else is good and hope all is well for you

    great reading your posts as usual

    thanx for the comments
    take care
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an interesting read and I found those lost two stanzas to be the most profound aspect of this write along with the theme. Nice imagery and a good flow. All in all a good write.

    Keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day and God bless. Thanks so much for sharing.


    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      not bad the first 2 are great, but the 3 and 4th don't measure up quite as well, particualrly in the smoothness. also the end, though it doesn't necessarily hurt, it doesn't help. It is interesting though, how differently the rain effects everybody, take care.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      As I believe you know
    I am a deep lover of the rain
    I will never stop praising its glory
    Yhe rain is one of the beautiful gifts God gave us to keep us alive and continue to bring us life
    I really loved this one done in your own unique style
    Once again Excellent Job
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      ah, i do always enjoy a good hardy rain, and God knows we get plenty of it here! wonderful for the soul and for cleansing and healing, i think.
    i love the simplicity of this and the obvious reverence you have for nature in all her beauty.

    peace&love,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I hear you girlfriend! It is raining here off and on. I am like so close to moving to Florida it is not even funny now. lol. But they got the hurricanes coming in soon...nevermind. This was good and I liked the touch at the end. I hope you get some dry days. Good work.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I was in some stormy, rainy weather this past weekend and found this poem to be surprisingly refeshing, even given the topic

    I like the description of "change" this implies. Life can be arid and parched, in great need of quinching waters.. and then a drop falls and creates a surging stream.. once again rejuvenating our minds and hearts.

    The "raining down" form was a nice touch.
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Tiff,

    It is amazing how powerful nature is and how we humans have no choice to succumb. The rains must really be coming where you live, not so much rain here yet in KC.

    and the rains continue
    to change the course
    of as once was
    to what "IT" is today

    Nice tie-in to the reast of the poem. But how about placing
    "raining down" in random places to emulate the real thing.
    I think it would be easier on paper than here though..

    nice one Tiff don't get too soggy my dear
    love and peace lady..

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Rain has always shaped and re-shaped the landscape. It gives, and sustains life to all living creations.

    No wonder it is so precious.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Rain!

    Flash floods!

    Desert to mud!

    Splish splash! Tiffffffffff..............

    I like rainy days because you look outside and go "ugh!" and then stay inside and read all day! I love to read!

    Water is the most important liquid in the world. Water builds, water breaks, water heals, and water changes.

    And the rain falls down...I'm coming..
    ..

    I like you poems, tiff. This one is full of emotion and yet it is very short. That is an accomplisment.

    Now I shall go put on my coat and boots and splash water all over little kids while they laugh with glee!

    OMGSPLOSION!
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, since we're all tellin nature stories, we've had like 5 tornadoes in the past week, 2 of which were within 20 miles from where I live and the other 3 in my town... so yeah... anyway, I like nature poems, and this one is very good. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]
      You know what this is intresting cause we got a flood warning here right now.

    The power of mother nature and the way she can reshape ever little peaice of ground that we call home.

    In such few words you described this to us
    and that

    raining down was a nice effect.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hows things this was very colorful and its funny where i am it snowed and now it is raining i like your views and poems about nature i guess i really dont spend much time appreciating the elements of mother nature even though i work outside all day

    hope all is well with you
    thanx for yor recent comments
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      The beginning line where it says "As once was the single drop is now a surging stream" is awsome because it shows the way that nature starts out with a little thing and makes it greater. It reminded me of floods and how ( at least here in Texas) everyone prays for rain and then sometimes when it comes it comes with a rage. Great write.

    much LOVE
    James
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]


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