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    dots Submission Name: Hellodots
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    Author: AngelOutlaw
    ASL Info:    21/female/OR & WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 672/392/64
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Prose/Friendship
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    Bytes: 804



    Description:
       So, I'm trying to decide if I should give this to the guy I wrote it about or not. Please let me know what you think. Any suggestions are appreciated!!!


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    dotsHellodots
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    You're like no one else I know. Your pride says you don't want anyone to know you, and that you don't give a damn about them either, but your face says different.

    Your eyes haunt me, (but don't think that I'm afraid of you) it's as if you can see into my soul, that my deepest secret is worn on my sleeve. You don't let me look away until you've verified what you were searching for.

    Your smile is like a little boy's and a loving father's. It invites me to take a step closer, to get to know the boy inside the trenchcoat-clad man. "I'm everything they see, but not the way you think," you say with your smile.

    So now I'm left to wonder if your pride is a mask, or if your face is a liar.




    Submitted on 2006-04-05 18:22:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think you should think about showing this to him. omg im so jealous, its been so long since you've written one for me. lol. tell me ab out his buy. ttyl babe~P
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i think u should give it to him. it might influence him to open up to you to show you exactly what he is like. some people hide behind a mask for so long that they forget the person they were trying to hide or maybe he just does't give of a fcuk about what the public thinks of him
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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