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    dots Submission Name: Her Saviordots
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    Author: Scarlett Rose
    ASL Info:    16
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 13/8/9
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 141
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    Bytes: 1079



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       I wrote this when I was really depressed and not really thinking straight. Personally, I think the poem could be better, but give me some constructive feedback. Thanks!


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    dotsHer Saviordots
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    The cold metal felt good against her skin
    The cut felt even better.
    As the blood rushed out,
    so did her emotions.
    She would sit and cry in the corner
    wrap the cloth around her wrists
    regret what she just did,
    not able to take it back,
    she would cry even more.
    Then out would come the rage,
    She'd slice her arms
    and then her legs
    till blood filled the bathroom floor.
    The only one who cared
    would come pounding at the door,
    He'd see the tear-stained face and bloody body
    against the wall.
    He's rush to her and hold her in his loving arms,
    tell her that it'll be okay and kiss her on the cheek,
    try to stop the bleeding
    becuase he's the one who cared.
    She's embarassed that he sees her like this
    but there's nothing she can do.
    She can see the fear in his eyes
    and out comes more tears.
    He cried along with her
    and whispers a simple
    "I love you."




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