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    dots Submission Name: Fourth Grade Poemdots
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    Author: darkwinged
    ASL Info:    17/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 184/217/74
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    Description:
       I found this the other day...it was something I wrote back in fourth grade when we talked about poetry and did it. These were the kind of poems where you come up with a word and write different words to create that word downwards...(mine spells out fast...)

    Enjoy my naitivity at the age of ten, the horse loving me.


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    dotsFourth Grade Poemdots
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    Fast horses are the
    Appaloosas running
    Swiftly
    Through a field.




    Submitted on 2006-04-06 11:09:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lmao! I remember when you wrote this! Like..I remember it was for some little poetry book thingy or something of the sort.

    I was jealous and I wish I could have written something like it.
    Actually, I was always jealous of you in 4th grade because you got better grades.haha.

    *thumbs up*
    -Courtney
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by leadpencil | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this because it does come pretty close to a haiku...you may want to trun this into one. It would be very good! For a fourth grader this was some major skills here. I will excuse the spelling, I still have trouble with it. lol. I seriously think you may want to make this into a haiku, it has major potential to be one. Very good.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this is almost a haiku, and not a bad write for a fourth-grader! you could, if you want to, do a little edit and have a powerful haiku. horses are gorgeous creatures, so powerful. i can see them running wild through the field.

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me think about watching "Deal or No Deal" last night where a guy could have won $200,000 but instead was happy that he took the "deal" of $44,000 and a Pony for his daughter because that was her greatest wish.

    He went over to her and did their "special handshake" routine and kissed her and took the deal just to make her happy.

    I cried
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]


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