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    dots Submission Name: Man-With-Sticky-Fingersdots
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    Author: Cigarz
    ASL Info:    35/M/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 258/183/50
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 221
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    Bytes: 1018



    Description:
       This is a prose piece, which steadies it's form upon the structure of short story telling. There are story telling elements involved, usually, which may encompass characters, signifiers of elapsed time, conflict and resolution. AS far as structure, though there exsists natural paragraph breaks, it is common to write in one single stream, block-like, with no indentation. Let me know what you think!


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    The clerk-squaw at the corner store where I shoplift has a crush on me. I am discreet, but she is in the concave mirror smiling and winking those over-extended eyelashes when I conceal beef jerky. She is a Chippewa tracker, a fur-traders bride-to-be. Her hatchet-stroked nose translates this as I glance side to side in reconnaissance. I am the beaver and her chance to be Pocahontas. In the bread aisle she leaves bait, gifts and scat like smoke signals, This is my range and I am in heat. I creep silently, fearful for my scalp, yet hungry nonetheless. In ignorance and denial I graze. When I do purchase maize to cover my tracks, she empties the take-a-penny-leave-a-penny cup to save my beadwork. I accept, knowing an extra fifteen cents could be used to buy Manhattan. She has tried to run with me, but I am too canny. As a wild spirit in a white-man’s trench coat, I cannot be tamed. We are not destined to be lovers, for she could be known as Horse-Faced-Thunder. Her plastic name badge says Trigger, of course.




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      I was confused reading this. It made me dizzy. lol. It had a good plot, and some good imagery, but I felt like I was on a merry go round at the speed of light. lol. Quite creative. I think it had a raw and intense feel. I just was overwhelmed by all the things going on at once.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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