Silent Beloved by Cigarz

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Submission Name: Silent Beloved dots

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Author:	Cigarz
ASL Info:	35/M/NH
Elite Ratio:	4.76 - 258/183/50
Words:	63

Class/Type:	Poetry/Passion
Total Views:	280
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	469

Description:
A bit of an erotic subject, mind you. Short lines to denote passion, boiled down to provide an essence of emotion. Let me know!

Silent Beloved dots

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Silk mouth scarf
Knotted behind,
Blind fold from the side.
Magic needle of leather straps;
Don’t hold back,
Burn me gently.
This is not my first time.
Sewn together with errors of hope,
Lashed with a bridal gown.
Wrists bound,
Welts raised, soft and pink,
Rising swollen,
Railroad ties striping away
To somewhere you’ve
Seen on the torn
Pages of some book.

Submitted on 2006-04-06 14:01:40 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hmm, you rarely see a poem about bondage and the like nowadays, if it really is about such acts.. and i do think it is. the first parts about the props were well described and rather tasteful. then it gets rather torrid around the mid.

"Burn me gently.
This is not my first time."

after that, it got physical, which was a nice touch, and aptly applied- since sex is purely a biological phenomena and a natural urge and need. and perverting it and with a twist of pain, which is really what bondage is all about .towards the end, you stay the debauchery and the primal needs to sort of traverse on the realm of ecstacy and the divine and otherwordly- the last lines in particular.

well rounded and seemingly relevant in a desynthesized society. i liked it, and i do need a cigarette now.

peace.

-pietro
| Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
  HA! Damn! Do you think erotic is a strong enough word to describe this poem? I think this is some damn kinky [censored] and honestly, sounds pretty damn painful! haha! Good imagery here and intense is an understatement. I didnt fully understand the ending and how the reflection of torn pages of some book had a connection to the rest of the poem but I gotta give you credit on the wild stuff! hee hee!!

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Freaky dinky! This was very wild and intense. I liked this one. I like the idea of bondage. You made it sound so good. And you kept it real by adding in the imagery of the welts. Great wording and flow. And it was fast paced. As if stripping clothes off for a quickie. Great work Todd!

Maggie
| Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh la la, spank a' licious. . . one comment: this poet must be real experienced to write sumthing so short yet so filled with detail and explicit imagers...Well done, mr. "This is not my first time" i truly enjoyed this

Keep spreading the love
Nadia*
| Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]

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