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    dots Submission Name: thornsdots
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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Dark
    Total Views: 925
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 297



    Description:
       its confusing and i dont even fully knows what it means myslef i just know it means something... ya know... its like bwing traspped by demons and not being able to escape... you are cornered by evil in your life and you cant escape..


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    liquid aphid centre spread
    pull the needle and the thread
    sew me up and tie me down
    let me wear my thorny crown

    as satan rolls another joint
    digging in my pressure point
    like puppet strings im never free
    let me dangle watch me bleed




    Submitted on 2006-04-06 21:22:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is really good your last two lines are perfect. I agree with heavenly that poems dont have to rhyme but you did a really good job and i dont think i would change a thing about it if i were you.

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    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a deep poem i understand what your saying and i feel your words but sometimes the best poetry dosent half to rhyme im not saying anything negative im just sayeing to be beautiful it dosent halfto rhyme verry deep though.
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by heavenly | [ Reply to This ]


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