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Author: Kelly17
ASL Info:    25/f/NY
Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 17 /8 /10
Words: 221
Class/Type: Lyrics /Romance
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This is something I wrote after "hiding" out with my b/f for awhile until life just kind of blew over


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Window shades are drawn once more
Alone in our own private world
We laugh as though we have no cares
Talking as if to ourselves
There are no secrets
Nothing that I don't think you would understand

I long for the sense of security
I feel only when you are around
The safety that encompasses me
As you circle your arms around me
The comfort that comes
Alone in our private world

I lay my head down on your chest
Listening to your heart beat in my ear
Feeling my head rise and fall
As you breathe
Joking with each other
We laugh as though we have no cares

I feel loved when I'm with you
As though no one else can touch me
I believe that I could fly
As long as you are behind me
We open our lives to each other
Talking as if to ourselves

We have created this special bond
One that can't be forgotten
A safety net
For both of us
Knowing I can tell you anything
There are no secrets

Window shades are drawn once more
Alone in our own private world
We laugh as though we have no cares
Talking as if to ourselves
There are no secrets
Nothing that I don't think you would understand




Submitted on 2006-04-07 08:24:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  There is no other feeling in the world as like being with and spending time with the one you love. You captured this sentiment very well. A very good write indeed.

Frank.
| Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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