Rain

Author: Emerging Soul ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240 /1114 /244 Words: 12

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Rain

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Rain falls Like fat diamond teardrops Dripping from an outrageous sky Shameless

Submitted on 2006-04-07 08:40:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Oh, the rain. I love it. The way it smells right before it washes everything clean. I like the way you describe them as teardrops and then end with saying they are shameless... for tears are usually followed by shame. Intersting write. Swanne

| Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]

There is alot that can be said in such few word What you have done here is painted a picture to the readers. The rain fallling washing away allthat is in her path cleaning the very soul of a touched earth ~shawn

| Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]

As I believe You know I really really love the rain You leasve one with a deep passion to caress the rain that is falling For those raindrops can and will wipe away all the negativity in ones life leaving them with a new passion in life eager to move forward That is probably the biggest reason I love the rain so much God Bless Ron

| Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

Barbara, I get a complex thought process in this...albeit small it begs to be dissected. It you discard "teardrops" and the rain is big fat diamonds falling from an outrageously shameless sky, it would take on an entirely different meaning. By using "teardrops" you give it a human touch, and drag the reader into the whys. Why the tears, why outrageous, why shameless? If you were simply being poetic in decribing the rain, then I've over-analyzed it...or have I? Interesting write indeed, images AND emotions be happy Graeme

| Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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