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    dots Submission Name: Smiledots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 459
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 404



    Description:
       Smile


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    dotsSmiledots
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    Somethings are special,
    sometimes magical,
    and it sometimes is the power,
    of someones smile.

    A smile that can save a live,
    that it makes a mind,
    think about happy things,
    and finally see the light.

    So it does not matter,
    what mood you are in,
    just look at someone smile,
    you'll feel better you'll see.




    Submitted on 2006-04-07 09:10:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is so true. when im feelin down, and someone smiles, i cant help but smile bac. nice poem,i like it.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, reading this poem made me smile
    But yes.. I do agree.. there IS something special in a smile.. and it is contagious and should be passed on (as you have done here).

    [In the first line.. "somethings" should be two words.]

    This is an enjoyable and uplifting poem, Jose.
    Thanks for sharing it.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya know, this is really cute cute cute and made me smile.... on this monday morning. Always nice to read a happy poem, and this one is definitely a happy one. The sentiment is sweet and a smile is a wonderful thing. I always try to bring people a smile because in this world we live in we need all the smiles we can get! Your poem gave me one this morning! Thank you. Your poem should bring a smile to anyone that reads it! Very nice. Take care...and smile smile smile!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. it made me smile too. and it is completely true. i like all ur writing. alot better then mine. seems like u've been writing longer then me. well keep up the good work.

    a.n.d. ~angel of his nightmare~
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Graham. Its simple, made me grin, :) and it reaches its goal. He pointed out all the nit picks so I do not have any corrections for you. Good write, keep smiling, and let the pen flow.

    Respect.
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by irish storm | [ Reply to This ]
      lovely poem and it made me smile .A couple of things i can point out for ya in the second stanza im unsure of what you meant by "that it makes a mind", it doesnt sound grammatically correct maybe change to "makes a mind".and the other thing i noticed is that in the 3rd line of the last stanza i think someone should be plural and therefore should be someones.But thats just nit picking hehe . A simple poem but it achieved its goal as it made me smile
    Graham
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah. Great poem you have going here. I think that you have written inadequate details about the benefits of smiling. But who am I to lecture you, I wrote a poem with the same title and that is far worse than this! *smiles*
    To me, it seems a bit incomplete, yet very good a write

    Thanks for sharing this,

    Abbas

    ps. I would like if you took a look at my poem smile

    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      So true! A smile can go a long way without ever even knowing it. Those are one of the many "little things" that go overlooked.

    For one to smile...it gives another a sense of security and at that moment....a sense of peace. Knowing that this person is smiling to bring upon a better reaction from the other. They feel positive therefore making the other feel positive.

    A smile is a special thing. And it is great that you can bring that to our attention.

    Thank you!

    Much love,

    LI LI
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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